Peer reviews

Paige
1.Is there a clear point of view? (position)
Yes, she made it very clear she does not approve of the quality of the lunch food.

2. Does the Op-Ed state the problem and solution simply?
yea i aggree that more kids will buy lunch of it tastes better so it will eliminate cost issues.

3. Does the piece address the counter arguments?
yes, better food will cost more.

4. Is the Op-Ed interesting?
yes very interesting because I also feel the same way about the quality, I can't stand days when i'm hungry yet none of the food looks appetizing.

5. Are the paragraphs organized logically?
Yes they are.

6. Does each paragraph develop an idea to support the thesis?
yes Paige had some very good ideas throughout the whole article.

7. Is the writing clear?
yes, very easy to read and follow the story the entire time.

Asad's review
1. Yes he is obviously intimidated by huge loans which we all should be, he wasn't saying don't take out loans, but make sure you will be able to pay off a massive loan due to over whealming interest costs.

2. Yes he made it clear that interest builds up fast, and the only solution is being well planned out.

3. Yeah.

4. very interesting because I know i will take out loans myself one day.

5. yes well organized it was easy to understand and follow the story.

6. yes and he also used real examples of people being overwhelmed by huge loans.

7. Asad's writting was crystal clear and well written.

Editorial Final draft

Have you ever felt like someone has been lying to your face for years and you didn’t even know about it? It seems that the teachers and administration of Eastview high school have been working for a healthier student body for the past few years, which is obviously quite the opposite. They have been making major changes in the lunch room and down grading the snack quality in the vending machine for years. I remember back to my freshman year grabbing a bag of chips and a bottle of cola, those were the good days. Now every other bag of chips is baked instead of fried in some good ol’ grease, and non-diet sodas are nowhere to be found. This troubles me greatly, it’s even affecting me in the classroom. I can’t pay attention during notes, slide-shows, or even teacher’s lectures due to lack of caffeine and sugar in my daily life. How can they expect students to get through class without their mental power-ups they purchase 2 minutes before the class bell, I mean they know we’re quite capable of throwing our garbage away ourselves. None of this adds up so I decided to look into the matter to find out some real answers. As I was pondering the matter at my study hall table in the East commons chatting with some buddies, I witnessed who appeared to be a teacher walk out of the teacher conference room holding a bottle of mountain dews finest refreshment. Completely blinded by jealousy, I did not even begin to start putting pieces together in my mind, I just simply figured they smuggled their own beverage in from home, smart. It wasn’t until the next day when I saw the same teacher walk into the very same room holding nothing, and exit the room with a full bottle of Mountain Dew. With my mind completely and utterly blown away my spidy-like senses began to ring like the bell in a fire house during a code-red emergency. Being as brave as a fireman, I lurked my way into the room and what I discovered made my jaw drop down to the floor. I stood there petrified, I felt like I was starring into the eyes of Medusa herself. As I glazed upon the 7 foot, brightly colored and well advertized soda machine I tried to find one soda I wouldn’t drink on a warm summer day. I was amazed that this machine wasn’t stocked with a single diet bottle of soda. My heart began to tear into two pieces as I realized what has been going on all these years. The teachers have been hording all of the good non-diet soda in the teacher’s conference room, saving all the refreshing caffeine and sugar for themselves. I felt like a professional boxer wound up and punched me right in the gut, I was devastated to say the least. I felt totally betrayed by the same people I trusted with my education, and not to mention my safety as a student of Eastview high school. I’m writing this story today as a fellow student who is being wrongfully stripped of his/her privileges of a good refreshing and energizing beverage in hopes to bring down the wall of lies that the school has been feeding us the past 3 years. Someday I hope to come back to this school and see happy students throughout the commons, halls and classrooms sipping on a beverage of their choice.

Soda Issues

1. A major issue that effects all Eastview student is the holdout on regular soda.

2. My view point is every student is capable of choosing the beverage of their choice, rather than limiting our choices to diet.

3. I would like to bring back good soda.

4.
A. More money for school.
B. Greater selection.
C. More energy in class.
D. Student's choice of beverage besides just diet.

5. I will uncover more feelings and ideas about the fact that the school is hording soda in the teacher's conferense room.

6. My editorial will bring good soda back to the students who have been stripped of their rights long ago.

Peer edit

I also read Nick Hiracheta's rough draft

1. I think you could be much more detailed on the cat's appearences.

2. The lead is heart warming and made me want to hear the epic story of finding the perfect new cat.

3. The intro was descriptive, I could almost picture being at your aunt's house in Wisconsin because I have family there and i believe they also take in a few strays.

4. I would like to hear more about how this cat became so massive, I could only imagine the size of Godzilla's food dish.

Peer edit

I reviewed Asad's feature story about the fall of Barry Bonds.

1. You state that Bonds grew cocky of himself, I believe you should be more descriptive of what he said to reporters and fans.

2. I do not know any additional sources but the lead brought me and had me interested in hearing many different view points on Bonds.

3. Yes, you did a very good job creating an image in my mind of the game that he passed the single season home-run record, very descriptive and well detailed.

4. I would have liked to hear maybe one or two more view points on Bonds.

news story

The topic of my feature story will be the importance of the new award winning movie "The Hurt Locker" that beat out Avatar for best picture and best director. I'll be interviewing people who have seen the movie and getting their view point and their feelings on how it brings the real dangers of war to life.

Final news story

Hockey fans around the world watched as two of the greatest hockey nations battled into sudden death overtime during the final event of the 2010 winter Olympics. The weight of the world was on the shoulders of each athlete as they proved they were ready to battle to the final seconds of the game for their country, pride, bragging rights, and the gold medal. The heated rivalry between the two neighboring hockey nations has never been more glorified then this final game allowing it to come down to one final goal shot off the stick of Sidney Crosby in sudden death overtime making the final score 4-3. He clinched the gold medal for his home country of Canada. Almost 80% of Canada tuned in to watch the game from their homes. At that same moment countless Americans also watched as their dreams of gold were crushed. Crosby is used to being in the spotlight but now more than ever will he be remembered as a hockey hero, at least in the eyes of his fellow Canadian citizens. However, many Americans feel differently about “Sid the Kid”, as I discovered after interviewing some of my peers. When I asked Tony Companion how he felt about Crosby he said, “I think he is a solid player, but I hate that he plays for Canada.” I also asked Nick Taschner if he loved, hated, or respected Crosby’s overtime goal he said, “I hate it because I’m American, but I respect it because I love hockey.” I have not yet had a chance to speak with anyone from Canada, but I’m sure they would have only great things to say about their new hero. There will always be mixed feelings about an athlete who is so influential in the game, but it seems everyone can at least agree he’s a top player on a world wide scale now.
Amongst all the excitement and drama over the hockey game and the Olympics, there are concerns about the next upcoming winter Olympics. There is debate on whether or not the NHL will allow its players to compete overseas at a chance to live in immortal glory. This debate brings up many mixed issues. Some believe that the best players should compete whether or not they are professional, while others believe the Olympics and NHL hockey should remain two different things. I asked a few of my friends what they thought about the issue, they both basically agreed on the same thing. When I asked Nick Taschner how he felt about NHL players competing in the Olympics he said “I like it because it makes it more competitive, and makes it a better hockey game.” Tony Companion says, “Yes because they are the best players we have to offer.” Most people enjoy watching their favorite hockey all-stars play in the Olympics, unless they are representing a different country that beats them of course. It also gives the players a chance away from the NHL to showcase their talent in front of millions of fans who may not watch them because of the location of their NHL team. Others believe if a player wanted to pursue a professional hockey career they shouldn’t be side tracked away from the NHL to the Olympics because they should continue practicing with their team. Another thing some people do not like is that the hockey league has to take a break in order for the few selected players to be able to compete in the Olympics. The games receive much more attention by fans when they see players who they know on the ice. Either way when it comes down to it the final outcome of the pro player’s Olympic future is in the hands of the people who will decide on the new rule for the next winter Olympics.

News Article

Hockey fans around the world watched as two of the greatest hockey nations battled into sudden death overtime during the final event of the 2010 winter Olympics. The weight of the world was on the shoulders of each athlete as they proved they were ready to battle to the final seconds of the game for their country, pride, bragging rights, and the gold medal. The heated rivalry between the two neighboring hockey nations has never been more glorified then this final game allowing it to come down to one final goal shot off the stick of Sidney Crosby in sudden death overtime. He clinched the gold medal for his home country of Canada as a reported 80% of all Canadian’s tuned in to watch the game from their homes. At that same moment countless Americans also watched as their dreams of gold were crushed. Crosby is used to being in the spotlight but now more than ever will he be remembered as a hockey hero, at least in the eyes of his fellow Canadian citizens. However, many Americans feel differently about “Sid the Kid”, as I discovered after interviewing some of my peers. When I asked Tony Companion how he felt about Crosby he said “I think he is a solid player, but I hate that he plays for Canada.” I also asked Nick Taschner if he loved, hated, or respected Crosby’s overtime goal he said “I hate it because I’m American, but I respect it because I love hockey.” I have not yet had a chance to speak with anyone from Canada, but I’m sure they would have only great things to say about their new hero. There will always be mixed feelings about an athlete who is so influential in the game, but it seems everyone can at least agree he’s a top player on a world wide scale now.

Amongst all the excitement and drama over the hockey game and the Olympics, there are concerns about the next upcoming winter Olympics not allowing professional NHL players to compete for their country. This also brings up many mixed issues, some believe that the best players should compete whether or not they are professional, and some believe the Olympics and NHL hockey should remain two different things. I asked a few of my friends what they thought about the issue, they both basically agreed on the same thing. When I asked Nick Taschner how he felt about NHL players competing in the Olympics he said “I like it because it makes it more competitive, and makes it a better hockey game.” Tony Companion says “Yes because they are the best players we have to offer.” Most people enjoy watching their favorite hockey all-stars play in the Olympics, unless they are representing a different country that beats them of course. It also gives the players a chance away from the NHL to showcase their talent in front of millions of fans who may not watch them because of the location of their NHL team. Others believe if a player wanted to pursue a professional hockey career they shouldn’t be side tracked away from the NHL to the Olympics because they should continue practicing with their team. Another thing some people do not like is that the hockey league has to take a break in order for the few selected players to be able to compete in the Olympics. The games receive much more attention by fans when they see players who they know on the ice. Either way when it comes down to it the final outcome of the pro player’s Olympic future is in the hands of the people who will decide on the new rule for the next winter Olympics.

Interview questions

(Nick Taschner):
1. How do you feel about NHL players competing in the olympics?
"I like it because it makes it more competitive, and makes it a better hockey game."

2. Do you hate, love, or respect Sydney Crosby’s sudden death goal?
"I hate it because i'm American, but respect it because I love hockey."

3. What were you feeling as team USA tied the game at the end of the 3rd period?
"I felt a bit of excitment, and extremely pumped."

4. Who was your favorite player to watch, why?
"I liked watching Patrick Cane because he moves the puck well, and is a solid playmaker."

5. Who were you with while watching the game?
"My family in my living room"

(Tony Companion):
1. What team did you want to bring home the gold and why?
"USA because it's my home country"

2. Was there any player you enjoyed watching the most?
"Brian Rafalski because he is a defensmen and he lead USA in goals."

3. Do you think NHL players should or shouldn’t be allowed to compete in the olympics, why?
"Yea because they are the best players we have to offer."

4. Did you lose faith in USA towards the end of the game?
"No, because I thought after the goal we were going to win.

5. What do you think about Sidney Crosby?
"I think he is a solid player, but i hate that he plays for Canada.

(Mike Chacich):
1. Where were you while watching the game?
"At my house"

2. Which team were you rooting for?
"Team USA because i'm a patriot."

3. Who were you with while watching the game?
"My girlfriend Jordan."

4. How much faith did you have in team USA?
"Honestly not that much because I knew how good Canada was."

5. Who was your favorite player from USA and Canada?
"Sydney Crosby from Canada and Zach parise from USA."

USA Olympic hockey team

Topic: Use suffers tough loss in sudden death overtime to team Canada